This I Believe

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This I Believe
I believe that some people die for a reason. Some people sacrifice their life for others like when people go to war they are sacrificing their lives to save our country. Those people who die in war, in a way, died for a reason and their reason to me would be that they were loyal to their country and gave their country their life to show that they are loyal and they care.
Other people like killers and those kinds of people die for the reason that they had killed and hurt others. Those people had to die because being a killer is wrong, they should not be killing people for reasons that maybe they are just taking out on someone else. I believe that those people are dieing for a reason because they shouldn't be killing people that don't have a reason to die.
The reason I believe this is because people that die in war know that they have the chance of dieing and people who kill know that they could have a chance of dieing, so most people do die for a reason. People who die in car accidents have a chance of dieing for a reason if they were drunk or something so they might know that they have a chance of dieing even if they don't realize it at the time because of being so drunk.
Others that die in accidents might not have a reason to die though. Like in the natural enviroment accidents like tornados, hurricanes, earthquakes, and more of those accidents don't kill people for a reason they just kill on accident.Those people are unfortunate and it's very sad when accidents like that happen because they didn't have a reason to die like others do.
This belief is really interesting to me because I think so much about how people do die and get killed because of others who do have reasons for example like how the drunk driver could die becaues of drinking and driving and they crash into another person so the other person may die too. If the drunk driver doesn't dies then I have a feeling that the person who was drunk and driving has a reason to die so maybe they are more likely to die for a reason now.
When people die for a reason when they give up their life or know they have a chance of dieing anyways, those people probably have a past of someone dieing for a reason or for no reason even because they want to serve for that person. They believe that if they do that things might be more right and they are showing that person who may be watching over them and always with them that they honor them and are loyal to them and want to serve for them.
People die for reasons yet others die for no reason at all. Either way we all die at some point, but I believe that we should all die for at least one reason.

one of my multigenre papers.

I did Shirley Temple and for this peice i did a descriptive paragraph on her later years. For this i would like responses on how you liked it and what i should do to explain anything better to you.

Shirley's Later Years
As Shirley grew up she didn't act as much as she used to. The public didn't want Shirley to grow up because she was so cute and they wanted her to be America's Sweetheart forever, so people didn't watch Shirley as much because she was growing up. So Shirley didn't act as much as she did in the past. At one point Shirley didn't act for seven years. She went back into the acting business in January 1957. There was a show called The Shirley Temple show on NBC on September 18, 1960 which Shirley had begun. In 1967, Shirley ran for congress in California. Shirley didn't win. A man named Pete McCloskey won. Shirley Temple had breast cancer but she told people that atmastectomy isn't the end of a womans life.